Style - write a nested structure paragraph

Malc Prentice

Sometimes you have an paragraph organisation like this

  1. Topic Sentence
  2. Problem 1 - Child labour
  3. Problem 2 - Pollution
    1. Air pollution
    2. Soil pollution
    3. Sea pollution
  4. Problem 3 - Poverty
  5. Summary and Link

If this happens, DO NOT do this:

>This paragraph describes three problems caused by production of something. The first problem is child labour. Detail on child labour. The second problem is pollution, of which there are three main kinds. The first is air pollution. Detail on air pollution. The second is soil pollution. Detail on soil pollution. The third is sea pollution. Detail on Sea pollution. The third problem is poverty. Detail on poverty. In summary, there are three problems - child labour, pollution, and poverty - of which the most serious is poverty, as it causes the other two. However, the next paragraph looks at some possible solutions.

Look carefully

SOlution - use other words instead

Example, fixed

>This paragraph describes three problems caused by production of something. The first problem is child labour. Detail on child labour. The second problem is pollution, of which there are three main kinds. One important form is air pollution. Detail on air pollution. Another is soil pollution. Detail on soil pollution. A further kind is sea pollution. Detail on Sea pollution. The third problem is poverty. Detail on poverty. In summary, there are three problems - child labour, pollution, and poverty - of which the most serious is poverty, as it causes the other two. However, the next paragraph looks at some possible solutions.