Alba English

Materials for Class

Avoid Repetition

A common style problem is using the same word too much.

Example

There are many children who have to work at cotton fields because the children’s household does not make much money. For example, in India, about 88% of the people working at cotton fields are children, from 6-14 years old. About 60% of the children are able to go to school at first, but they are forced to quit and have to work at the cotton fields (“Cotton industry and child labor,” n.d.). In addition, 78% of these children are…

Option 1: Use a pronoun

Option 2: Join sentences and delete the subject

This also helps improve short sentences.

Option 3: Use other words that mean the same

Option 4: Use “these”, “those”

Option 5: “of which”, “of whom”

Example, fixed

There are many children who have to work at cotton fields because their household does not make much money. For example, in India, about 88% of the people working at cotton fields are minors, from 6-14 years old. About 60% of those are able to go to school at first, but they are forced to quit and have to work at the cotton fields (“Cotton industry and child labor,” n.d.). In addition, 78% of themare…

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