Style - Write a Nested Paragraph

Sometimes you have an paragraph organisation like this. Look at point 2.

• Topic Sentence
• Problem 1 - Child labour
  • Some detail
  • Some detail
• Problem 2 - Pollution
  • Air pollution
  • Soil pollution
  • Sea pollution
• Problem 3 - Poverty
  • Some detail
  • Some detail
• Summary and Link

DO NOT do this:

This paragraph describes three problems caused by production of something. The first problem is child labour. Detail on child labour. Detail on child labour. The second problem is pollution, of which there are three main kinds. The first pollution type is air pollution. Detail on air pollution. The second pollution type is soil pollution. Detail on soil pollution. The third pollution type is sea pollution. Detail on Sea pollution. The third problem is poverty. Detail on poverty. Detail on poverty. In summary, there are three problems - child labour, pollution, and poverty - of which the most serious is poverty, as it causes the other two. However, the next paragraph looks at some possible solutions.

Can you see how this will be confusing?

• Only use “First”, ONCE!
• Never use “Finally” in the middle of something

###SOlution - use other words instead

• Topic Sentence
• The first problem is
  • One issue is
  • Another issue is
  • An additional issue is
• The second problem is
  • The most common type is
  • Less common but more dangerous is
  • In addition,
• The third problem is
  • The main
  • An additional
  • Also important is
• Summary and Link

###Example, fixed

This paragraph describes three problems caused by production of something. The first problem is child labour. Detail on child labour. Detail on child labour. The second problem is pollution, of which there are three main kinds. An important form of this is air pollution. Detail on air pollution. Another form is soil pollution. Detail on soil pollution. A further form is sea pollution. Detail on sea pollution. The third problem is poverty. Detail on poverty. Detail on poverty. In summary, there are three problems - child labour, pollution, and poverty - of which the most serious is poverty, as it causes the other two. However, the next paragraph looks at some possible solutions.